Revise, revise, revise--but don't overdo it

My last post contained an example of what can happen to a sentence after five revisions:

"Paul Gayten's 1953 Cow Cow Blues andOoh-Boo are yet two more examples of rock and roll B.E. (Befroe Elvis), while Frankie Carle's stride-style rendition of Twelfth Street Rag has nothing to do with that style, though it does predate Pee Wee Hunt's smash-hit version by eight years."


I read it today and went, "Huh?"  Then I did this revision, which wasn't much better:


"Paul Gayten's 1953 Cow Cow Blues and Ooh-Boo are yet two more examples of rock and roll B.E. (Befroe Elvis), while Frankie Carle's stride-style rendition of Twelfth Street Rag does the song total justice a full eight full years B.P. (Before Pee Wee Hunt)."


Huh? Part 2.


Finally, this acceptable alteration:


"Paul Gayten's 1953 Cow Cow Blues and Ooh-Boo are yet two more examples of rock and roll B.E. (Befroe Elvis), while Frankie Carle's stride-style rendition of Twelfth Street Rag is an instance of ragtime B.T.S. (Before The Sting)."


We'll see how this looks to me tomorrow. Why is this double-spacing the paragraphs?


Lee